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Cohesion and coherence in writing1/11/2024 ![]() To encourage my students to improve the flow of their ideas between paragraphs, I have them first reflect on the cohesion of someone else’s writing piece before turning their attention to their own. This can result in choppy writing that lacks a logical flow of ideas. When English language learners begin writing essays, they often rely on simple transition words, such as “first,” “second,” and “finally” to transition between paragraphs. According to the public version of IELTS Writing Band Descriptors to achieve a 7 for coherence and cohesion, the test taker needs to logically organize information and ideas, have a clear progression throughout, use a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use, and present a clear central topic within each paragraph. In conclusion, although technology is trying to keep people active in different ways, I believe that health is affected negatively by fast food and technology, and it will be a problem in the future.Coherence and cohesion is one of the four criteria assessed on the Writing section of IELTS. Hopefully, with all of these innovative ways to stay active, people will become healthier in the future. Some also believe that different types of sports and other forms of exercise will appear in the future. There are also video games which promote physical activity such as sports games. There are apps that track how many daily steps a person takes. With the ever-growing technological advances come new ways to stay physically active. Other people might disagree and say that health will improve in the future. Both of these reasons result in lazy people. Spending long hours in front of the screen can lead to poor eyesight and depression. Young people enjoy buying the latest devices and this has a negative impact on their health, especially their mental and physical well-being. Another reason is that technology is developing every day. As a result, having a lot of unhealthy food can lead to obesity and could become a serious issue in the future. This appears to be because people are busier now than they used to be and they don’t have a chance to cook at home. People tend to eat more fast food nowadays. There are many reasons that support the idea of people becoming unhealthy in the future. In my opinion, I think that people will become unhealthier in the future than they are now. Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about health and whether it is going to improve or not. ![]() The topic is clear throughout and different types of cohesive devices are used in order to tie everything together. This writing is coherent because there’s an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. ![]() ![]() This figure, which reached a high of just 90 a few years later, fell slightly in the last year to roughly 80 in 2010. Likewise, around 100 white chocolate bars were eaten in the first year after which the figure fluctuated slightly and dropped to 50 in 2010.Īlternatively, the consumption of dark chocolate bars started at only 20 in 2001. With regards to the number of milk chocolate bars eaten, it began around 150 and then peaked at 170 in 2003 before falling dramatically to about 60 in the final year. Following this, dark chocolate became the bar with the highest consumption rate in the final year. ![]() At the start of the period, milk chocolate bars were the most popular, but were overtaken by white chocolate bars from 2004 to 2005. Overall, the number of white and milk chocolate bars consumed decreased over the period given, while for dark chocolate, it increased. The line graph depicts the number of chocolate bars (dark, white, and milk chocolate) which were consumed over 10 years from 2000 to 2010. Notice that there is a range of words and phrases to make this task cohesive in an effective way. Some examples of cohesive devices that were used are highlighted. Also, the body paragraphs are grouped into similar trends and opposite trends within the graph. The writing is coherent because there's an introduction and body paragraphs. ![]()
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